Dee (irritated): Hakim-a-barber! I can't believe you'd show such ignorance towards my family!
Hakim-a-barber (sarcastic): I have no idea what you're talking about.
Dee: You know exactly what I'm talking about! Not eating my mothers collard greens, as well as making such a cruel remark. 'My pork's too dry', what ignorance.
Hakim-a-barber (with attitude): You're making a big deal out of nothing. I simply said I didn't like her food. It's not like I threw the food across the room.
Dee (slightly agitated): You're missing the point! I would never do that towards your family!
Hakim-a-barber (calm): I would hope not. That would be ignorant on your part. You would be a disgrace to my family.
Dee (furious): What?! You're absolutely ridiculous. If you're so caught up in your reputation, you can forget about me coming with you. I'll go to school alone, and make something of myself instead of wasting my time with a fool like you.
Hakim-a-barber (serious): If anyone is a fool here, it's you.
Dee (furious): Fine! Be that way, but don't you dare try to show your face in my presence ever again. (gets out of car and goes home to Mama and Maggie)
I really liked this Hailey! I liked that it wasn't about how Dee didn;t get her way with the quilts. It was very original. I just noticed a few little mistakes with sentence structure and you put "my mothers" instead of my mother's. That was probably just a typo though. But anyway good job!
ReplyDeleteoops! I meant didn't
ReplyDelete