Hakim-a-barber: I'm sorry that I didn't speak up for you in there, honey. The way you used to live is so different than anything that I have ever seen before. I wanted to soak it all in. I'm also sorry because I agree with your mother; Maggie deserves the quilts.
Dee: (turned to Hakim teary-eyed) Hakim, don't you understand? Those quilts are my heritage. They are filled with the kindness and love of my grandparents. All Maggie is going to do is use the quilts for warmth, or as a rug, or maybe even as a cleaning wipe!
Hakim-a-barber: (now looking at her sobbing, he held her hand) Honey, I think that you are losing your heritage. Listen to you. Look at your mother and sister sitting out there. They love you. They are both so proud of you and your many accomplishments. Your mother only wants the best for you, but she also wants the quilts to be used the way that she knows them to be used.
Dee: (she took a minute to realize what he had said and wiped her tears) You are right. To be honest, I've never hung a quilt on the wall in my whole life! I actually think that it's wasteful. I wanted to be more like you and all of our friends, but I'm not like you; I'm different.
Hakim-a-barber: (now smiling he gave her a hug) Spend the night with your family, you need it. I'll come for you in the morning, Wangero.
Dee: Thank you so much. (as she got out of the car and was about to shut the door, she peeked her head in) And please, call me Dee.
Its pretty good Hollis. Next time don't take my characters. I like how you described the way the characters spoke.
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ReplyDeleteI really, really liked this Hollis!! I honestly think it could have been an honest continuation (probably not a word) of the story. The only thing you should look at is the structure of your sentences. I saw like one fragment but that's okay :) Again, super job!
ReplyDeleteThank ya much!
Hailey