Wednesday, September 14, 2011

My Ordeal by Cheque by Kristen Zolnierzak

On August 30th, 1903 Lawrence Exeter did some baby shopping for his soon to be coming son. A few days later Lawrence Exeter Jr. was born. He came out to be a healthy baby. When he was a month old Lawrence Jr. came down with something so his father took him to the hospital. Dr. McCoy sait it was only a cold and if he takes his medicine daily it would be gone in about a week. When Lawrence Jr. turned six he joined Palisades School for Boys. For his seventh birthday he got a new bicycle. A few years later after he was done with schooling he joined the military. He got enough money in the military to buy his own Cadillac. Unfortunitly it was a used one and the engine was bad so he had to get it fixed. When he finally left the military he went to Standford Unibersity. There he found someone he really liked, Miss Daisy Windsor. After many years of dating they decided they wanted to live together so they bought a house. He always bought her flowers. Lawrence Jr. and Miss Daisy were doing very well. One day he thought, " I want to get married." That day he bought a diamond ring. He planed a trip to Hawaii and there he proposed to her. Daisy excepted excitidly. They wanted to get married right away so they started to find the perfect dress and suite. They rented out a very nice castle in Italy fro the wedding. A few days later they got married. Daisy is now called Mrs. Lawrence Exeter Jr.. That year and the year after they lived happily. Lawrence Jr. began to feel very sick. He went to the Hollywood Hospital. Only to find out that he had cancer and would only live for about a week and a couple days unless the chemotherapy worked out. Dr. David M. McCoy tried giving him chemo but sadley it wasn't working. Mrs. Exeter stayed by his side the whole time even though it wasn't easy for her to see him like that. She cried almost everyday and told him how much she loved him. On July 16th, 1931 a year after their marriage Lawrence Exeter passed away.

2 comments:

  1. Thanks for posting Kristen... there were some details missing from your story; however, I enjoyed reading your narrative. Next time, please watch your spelling. Keep up the hard work!
    -Ms. Balas

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  2. Your story was so bad but,the problem was that it seemed rushed,not so creative and entertaining till the middle of the story. But good effort though!

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