Tuesday, September 13, 2011

Ordeal by Cheque by Sierra Wilson

It was the year of 1903 when Mr. and Mrs. Lawrence Exeter had a wonderful baby boy named Lawrence Exeter Junior, but its sad to say that Mrs. Exeter died giving birth. Mr. Exeter spoiled his son with with expensive toys and a brand new bike to make his son happy, even though he was miserable. Junior had a temper so bad that his father made him go to the Columbia Military Academy when he was 12. He often got good grades and his attitude seemed to improve, so his father bought him a brand new red Cadillac for his 18th birthday which he crashed only four days later from being heavily drunk. Junior got back on track and got a scholarship to Stanford University in 1921. So his father only paid for books. That's where he met Miss Daisy Windsor.
Junior tried impressing Miss Daisy with expensive gifts and clothing. He wanted to marry her so bad, but Miss Daisy had other plans. She wanted to be free and travel the world. So when Junior asked her to marry him, she refused. He finally found a way to get Miss Daisy to marry him. Junior promised Daisy that if she agreed to marry him, he would take her to France and give her whatever she wanted. Daisy couldn't turn down a chance to go to France, it was her dream. So she agreed to marry Junior. While in France, Junior bought her anything she wanted. Daisy was starting to like the fact that she could get what she wanted from her husband, and she loved the way he spoiled her with the best of things, but Daisy wanted more. She convinced Junior to buy them a house there because she loved it so much. But Daisy soon began to grow tired of France, so she told Junior to take her to Hawaii for a vacation. There, they stayed at The Ambassador Hotel. One night Junior went to the hotel's casino to gamble and have a couple of drinks. He realized he was pretty good and started to do it every night.
On the night of August 23. 1929 he met Tony Spagoni, one of the best gamblers around. Junior new he had to win because Tony was betting big money. Junior was starting to lose to Tony and he new he had to do something, so he cheated and won the money. After the game was over, Junior was walking back to his suite when Tony pointed a gun to Juniors head. Tony told him that he knew Junior had cheated and he wanted his money or Junior was going to die. Junior agreed and wrote him a check for one hundred and twenty six dollars. Junior told Daisy what had happened and she wasn't happy at all. Daisy was greedy for money. She loved being rich, so when she found out Junior had lost money she was furious at at him. They had a huge fight that night and Junior didn't like it. He thought that women should never fight with their husbands and never speak out of place, especially when he gave her whatever she wanted. In fact Junior hated Daisy for criticizing him about wasting money on foolish things. So Junior went back to gambling to prove that gambling wasn't foolish.
Junior cheated Tony out of his money once again. Tony didn't like to lose money to an amateur, so Tony threaten to kill Junior's father if he didn't pay him the money. Junior payed Tony the money and never gambled after that, instead he began to drink at a local bar. He bought most of his alcohol from Miss Flossie Wentworth, she owned the bar he liked to drink at. He began to have serious feelings for Flossie, not knowing that he was Tony Spagoni's girlfriend. Junior bought Flossie expensive clothing, flowers and jewelry the way he used to buy things for Daisy. Flossie liked being spoiled, like any other girl, so she broke off her relationship with Tony and Junior filed for divorce.
When Daisy found out Junior wanted to get a divorce, she was furious and flabbergasted. She had no more money to spend, she was going to be poor and she knew Junior had found someone else. He had been gone every night on "business trips". So when Junior left one night, she followed him. When she saw Junior kissing that nasty Flossie Wentworth she recognized her from the school she went too and knew that she had been involved with Tony Spagoni. She was enraged with anger. Daisy couldn't believe that Junior would leave him for that tramp! She wanted Junior dead.
When Daisy confronted Junior about Flossie, he told her that they were in love and were going to spend the rest of their lives with each other. Junior tried giving her 5,000 dollars to buy herself her own house and to ask for forgiveness because he had wasted her time. Junior also told Daisy that he was taking back everything he bought her because it was his. This only made Daisy even more angry. So she told Tony what was going on and he agreed help murder that cheating Lawrence Exeter Junior. They knew they couldn't kill Junior themselves, so Daisy paid Tony Spagoni $200 dollars to hire a man named Peter Ventizzi to kill Junior.
When Peter showed up at Junior's house on July 3. 1931 with a gun, Junior knew he was going to die. Peter told him that he wouldn't kill Junior if he paid him a measly $25 dollars. Junior wrote him a check with a shaky hand, and Peter left. When Daisy heard that Junior was still alive the next day, she knew she had to kill him herself. So that night she snuck into Junior's house and stabbed him with a knife four times and watched Junior suffer, exactly they way she did. She left no evidence for the police to find and no memory of Lawrence Exeter Junior.

5 comments:

  1. Thanks for commenting on my story so nicely Sierra! I really loved your story. It was different yet it still made perfectly good sense that Tony was a fellow gambler! You put your own nice twist to the story and I loved it. It was very interesting, and very good.

    Hope you're feeling better!
    Brooke

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  2. Your such a loser!!!
    But good story:)

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  3. Brooke- Have you figured out how to comment as yourself? Let me know. :)

    Dan- Keep the comments to constructive criticism please. This is not the forum for antagonizing.

    Sierra- Nice job. It was a detail-oriented plot, and it was very creative. Next time, let's divide it into paragraphs; and let's proofread a little more closely. Keep up the hard work!
    -Ms. Balas

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  4. Nice work Nicole. You should proofread a little more but all in all it was creative and unique.

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  5. Nice work Nicole. You should proofread a little more but all in all it was creative and unique.

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